Sleep

This is my response to the Monday Mural prompt at Poefusion (the image above is this week’s prompt). I chose to write this in chained lunes. Enjoy.

-Nicole

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Soft sleeping Virgin,
did you fall to Earth
from your perch

on the moon
and sink into the ground
to take repose?

That moon perch
lays bowed in the sky
above sleeping eyes -

your sleeping eyes,
for us to gaze upon
in loving awe.

Dare we disturb
your quiet, entombed, lucid dreaming
to request intercession

for our frailty
as we forever unfailingly fall
and find sin?

Written 6/15/08
©2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
Stumble It!

Stumble It!

~ by ravenswingpoetry on Sunday, June 15, 2008.

Posted in Chained lune, Experiences, Lune, Poems, Prompt Poems
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13 Responses to “Sleep”

  1. This is lovely!

    Noah said this on Sunday, June 15, 2008 at 4:54 pm

  2. wow.. i hadn’t even looked at monday mural yet.. that photo is amazing ,, and what you did with it perfection…

    paisley said this on Sunday, June 15, 2008 at 8:56 pm

  3. i love the way the lines flow together effortlessly. wonderful soft rhythm.

    lissa said this on Sunday, June 15, 2008 at 9:07 pm

  4. feels like a prayer of some sort and yet in doesn’t end that way, perfect match for the image

    lissa said this on Sunday, June 15, 2008 at 9:46 pm

  5. Thank you everyone for your comments. My first thought when I saw Monday Mural was of Our Lady of Guadalupe. I am not Catholic, but I work in a Catholic seminary, and I am learning more about Marian devotion. I guess we all need a mother, someone who gives unconditional acceptance. But I wonder – who took care of Mary?

    Just some random thoughts.

    Thank you all for visiting.

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Monday, June 16, 2008 at 9:21 am

  6. Beautifully written. Your words take us on a journey from a born Virgin to a fall into sin. Thanks for sharing such a wonderful poem. Have a nice day.

    Michelle Johnson said this on Monday, June 16, 2008 at 3:15 pm

  7. Thank you for your compliments. I am honored.

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Monday, June 16, 2008 at 3:47 pm

  8. a beauty, chained lune — i have to learn this form.
    a ethereal quality in your poem that is enchanting.

    Jade said this on Monday, June 16, 2008 at 10:44 pm

  9. Thank you, Jade.

    I’ve just started experimenting with shorter forms like lunes and hay(na)ku – I find that chained, they can effectively tell a story or convey an idea without an excess of words.

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Tuesday, June 17, 2008 at 8:59 am

  10. Chained lunes. I like the oncept. Very beautiul..

    sleeping dreams

    gautami tripathy said this on Tuesday, June 17, 2008 at 11:02 pm

  11. Thank you, gautami.

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Wednesday, June 18, 2008 at 8:58 am

  12. “unfailingly fall”

    Ooh . . . I can feel that sometimes.

    Blessings,
    L

    CROSSROADS, on NICKERS AND INK

    Linda - Nickers and Ink said this on Thursday, June 19, 2008 at 9:59 am

  13. Oh yeah, and just when you think you’ve got all of your stuff together, too. I *know* how that is.

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Thursday, June 19, 2008 at 11:24 am

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