Silent Drama
This was written both as a response to this week’s Simply Snickers prompt (write a poem with the words secret and silent) and as a response to the following excerpt from Monday’s post on Lutheran Surrealism:
“Even more boring: I like to watch plants grow, and to see if I can catch them at it. Hard to make a drama out of such a thing.”
So…this is my attempt to make a drama out of such a thing. And a pantoum to boot. Enjoy.
-Nicole
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silent still still still
breathe in out still
freeze focus don’t blink
watch watch watch watch
breathe in out still
cells divide inch up
watch watch watch watch
one inch of green
cells divide inch up
stalk stalk grow slow
one inch of green
leaves extend to sunlight
stalk stalk grow slow
a secret silent drama
leaves extend to sunlight
sit watch watch watch
a secret silent drama
freeze focus don’t blink
sit watch watch watch
silent still still still
Written 6/17/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
i love the use of word repetition here.. i have never tried that in a pantoum… and the idea that you are attempting to catch plants growing,, makes it fun….
Thank you, paisley. I have never tried to watch plants grow, but I imagine it would take a lot of mental concentration and the ability to get used to a sore behind from sitting.
-Nicole
This is excellent. I do love pantoums!
Thank you. Pantoums normally kick my butt, but this time it seemed to just flow.
-Nicole
This is really cool. I like the way you exaggerate simplicity. I’m not familiar with a Pantoum. Thanks for new term for me to check out. Peace!
Love this!
The imagery reminds me of the beautiful scientific time-lapse photography of seed germination and growth.
What a wonderful image for life.
Blessings,
Linda
CROSSROADS, on NICKERS AND INK
You have captured the spirit of slow progress and injected it with amazing, breathless drama.
Thank you, all!
-Nicole