You Want This
This was written for the Friday Five Prompt at Poefusion. This week’s words were: doctor, roll of film, secret, telephone, and stairwell. Enjoy.
-Nicole
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You want this. You want this secret burning
connection as badly as I do. In
the stairwell we dampen this shared yearning
with looks saturated with words, unspoken –
we don’t dare raise our voices, even to
share a whisper. But still, you want this. No
matter how much you fret and complain, you
can’t deny your desire, doctor – so
just give up. You want this. You know it. I
am a nurse, a caretaker – I can sense
the pain in hidden dark corners, denied.
Our clandestine telephone parlances
and this roll of film with photos of us
prove me right. Confess your love – stop this madness.
Written 6/26/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
Wow. This is so strong. Excellent work, Nicole! I found your site via poets who blog. Thank you for sharing!
i love the strong, passionate voice.
You know, I did like this poem- the voice is very strong and passionate, the atmosphere you create is very real, however I felt that somewhere you were explaining too much… with the word doctor onwards, it sounded very forced…
Hope this helps!
Cheers
Ayesha.
I like the tongue-in cheek humour of this -’you can’t deny your desire / doctor’.
doctor, doctor give me the news! i’ve got a bad case of lovin’ you! nice job. have a nice day.
Hello all:
Thank you for dropping by and leaving your compliments and honest assessments. Friday Five always presents a challenge to me because of the variety of words that are picked – but I am not one to shrink from a challenge.
Keep looking for more Friday Five poetry!
-Nicole
Full of passion, promise and hidden agenda! Nice work!
Thank you, tumblewords! I used a family story for inspiration on this one.
-Nicole
i gotta feelin the doctor is in a pickle of sorts… but loved how you set the scene… with whispers, hidden dark corners, the nurse as a caretaker…
Thank you, piece of pie.
-Nicole