You Want This

This was written for the Friday Five Prompt at Poefusion. This week’s words were: doctor, roll of film, secret, telephone, and stairwell. Enjoy.

-Nicole
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You want this. You want this secret burning
connection as badly as I do. In
the stairwell we dampen this shared yearning
with looks saturated with words, unspoken –

we don’t dare raise our voices, even to
share a whisper. But still, you want this. No
matter how much you fret and complain, you
can’t deny your desire, doctor – so

just give up. You want this. You know it. I
am a nurse, a caretaker – I can sense
the pain in hidden dark corners, denied.
Our clandestine telephone parlances

and this roll of film with photos of us
prove me right. Confess your love – stop this madness.

Written 6/26/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.

Stumble It!

Stumble It!

~ by ravenswingpoetry on Thursday, June 26, 2008.

Posted in English sonnet, People, Poems, Prompt Poems, Sonnet
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10 Responses to “You Want This”

  1. Wow. This is so strong. Excellent work, Nicole! I found your site via poets who blog. Thank you for sharing!

    Julie Buffaloe-Yoder said this on Thursday, June 26, 2008 at 3:43 pm

  2. i love the strong, passionate voice.

    lissa said this on Thursday, June 26, 2008 at 5:24 pm

  3. You know, I did like this poem- the voice is very strong and passionate, the atmosphere you create is very real, however I felt that somewhere you were explaining too much… with the word doctor onwards, it sounded very forced…
    Hope this helps!
    Cheers
    Ayesha.

    Ayesha said this on Friday, June 27, 2008 at 1:19 am

  4. I like the tongue-in cheek humour of this -’you can’t deny your desire / doctor’.

    watermaid said this on Friday, June 27, 2008 at 4:51 am

  5. doctor, doctor give me the news! i’ve got a bad case of lovin’ you! nice job. have a nice day.

    Michelle Johnson said this on Friday, June 27, 2008 at 6:43 am

  6. Hello all:

    Thank you for dropping by and leaving your compliments and honest assessments. Friday Five always presents a challenge to me because of the variety of words that are picked – but I am not one to shrink from a challenge.

    Keep looking for more Friday Five poetry!

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Friday, June 27, 2008 at 9:47 am

  7. Full of passion, promise and hidden agenda! Nice work!

    Tumblewords said this on Friday, June 27, 2008 at 9:25 pm

  8. Thank you, tumblewords! I used a family story for inspiration on this one.

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Sunday, June 29, 2008 at 1:01 pm

  9. i gotta feelin the doctor is in a pickle of sorts… but loved how you set the scene… with whispers, hidden dark corners, the nurse as a caretaker…

    pieceofpie said this on Wednesday, July 2, 2008 at 12:05 pm

  10. Thank you, piece of pie. :)

    -Nicole

    ravenswingpoetry said this on Thursday, July 3, 2008 at 9:02 am

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