Comments on: Doorways

By: ravenswingpoetry

ravenswingpoetry — Sun, 06 Jul 2008 17:15:32 +0000

Thank you, all. That is true – I think we remember all these stories and don’t think of the emotions behind them and the people inside of them. Oddly enough, the film “Dogma” gave me the inspiration of this poem (Matt Damon plays Loki, who was the Angel of Death until he stepped down). Watching the film in a sense, inspired me to try to get inside the Angel’s head as he’s about to do his dreaded job.

-Nicole

By: Lisa at Greenbow

Lisa at Greenbow — Sat, 05 Jul 2008 13:30:48 +0000

This is haunting to me. Such a scary thought that continues though the tribes change.

By: Raven

Raven — Thu, 03 Jul 2008 20:07:26 +0000

Remarkable. I love the “doorways betray their keepers” repetitive line. It’s also a wonderfully intense reflection on what Passover really was… I think it’s so easy for us to gloss over the intense truths of familiar words and stories without connect to their depth. Very impressive. As I said last week – I don’t think I’d have the skill or patience to work in such a complex form, but you do it with great skill.

By: pieceofpie

pieceofpie — Wed, 02 Jul 2008 22:32:26 +0000

i agree this flows so well in telling the story….

By: ravenswingpoetry

ravenswingpoetry — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 12:46:06 +0000

Thank you, Cynthia, Pam, and Kathie.

-Nicole

By: Pam

Pam — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 12:03:39 +0000

Very nice Passover Pantoum. I enjoyed how the repetition built up the suspense.

By: Cynthia

Cynthia — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 04:42:35 +0000

Powerful, you’ve struck the ancient voice perfectly,Nicole, delve inside
the heads of these men.

By: Kathiespoettree

Kathiespoettree — Tue, 01 Jul 2008 00:27:29 +0000

Well written. I can feel the horror! A dark night for all. I think I’ll just stay indoors tonight!

By: ravenswingpoetry

ravenswingpoetry — Mon, 30 Jun 2008 22:45:15 +0000

Edward and Patricia:

Thanks for stopping by! I thought the pantoum would be the best for this because of how haunting the story is and how macabre the task at hand. I glad I was not an Egyptian when Moses was around, either. I am honored by your compliments.

-Nicole

By: Patricia (a/k/a Roswila)

Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) — Mon, 30 Jun 2008 22:15:41 +0000

Wonderful. As I said in a previous comment to one of yours, I’m amazed at poets who work in intricate forms like pantoums. In this case, the form’s rhythms and repeated lines are especially effective in telling the story. A chant, indeed! A battle chant.