Comments on: Exit

By: Pam

Pam — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 16:40:41 +0000

I fully identify with this poem having moved many times. Sometimes it is still an adventure.

By: ravenswingpoetry

ravenswingpoetry — Wed, 09 Jul 2008 14:14:42 +0000

Thank you, everyone. If you haven’t already guessed, I am the girl in the poem. U-Haul trailers are ugly no matter what angle you view them from.

-Nicole

By: lirone

lirone — Mon, 07 Jul 2008 22:43:14 +0000

I particularly like the metaphor of the truck blocking her view… altogether a very effective poem.

By: Michael Ivy

Michael Ivy — Mon, 07 Jul 2008 22:08:29 +0000

That was wonderful!

By: Raven

Raven — Mon, 07 Jul 2008 04:04:09 +0000

This is beautifully done and speaks volumes of pain and loss and hurt. You manage to connect us with the child’s feeling and those of the adult looking back at one and the same time. Beautifully done.

By: Patricia (a/k/a Roswila)

Patricia (a/k/a Roswila) — Mon, 07 Jul 2008 03:39:24 +0000

I agree with Sandy’s comment…almost palpable, and one can “see” it readily. I moved a lot the first two-thirds of my life, so I really relate.

By: SandyCarlson

SandyCarlson — Mon, 07 Jul 2008 01:01:29 +0000

Wow. The sorrow is palpable. The loneliness breaks my heart. I can see this as I read it.

Thanks for being a part of OSI.

By: Joyce T.

Joyce T. — Mon, 07 Jul 2008 00:13:54 +0000

Poor kiddo! Very sad.