This was written for the Read Write Poem prompt #34: “this little light of mine”. On the theme of “light” I played around with the hay(na)ku form, marrying regular and reverse hay(na)ku together in each stanza. “Light” is the result of my experiment. Enjoy.
-Nicole
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light
once shone
in my dreams
from the stars
moon and
sun
this
parade of
celestial royalty prostrated
itself before my
single shining
star
the
light of
father’s love was
emblazoned in colors
on my
coat
kaleidescope
rainbows in
the finest fabric
wrapped my body
and soul
daily
I
took light
as my inheritance
leaving my brothers
in the
dark
I
cast more
darkness on them
with lies and
tattle tale
words
now
the only
light I see
comes in a
hair thin
stream
a
singular strand
piercing the darkness
of this pit
where I
wait
Written 7/6/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
love the structure. those last two stanzas especially grab me.
Powerful!
nice form,, and sad content… if punishment was lack of light,, most of us would live in darkness…..
An interesting experiment. I think it works – I especially like
piercing the darkness
of this pit
where I
wait
Even though this is a story of Joseph,you were able to show the universal nature of waiting how humans wait in the dark, with our hopes pinned on that single strand of light. Delicate verse!
nice use of the form.
“hair thin stream of light” — a wonderful image.
yeah, what they all sed… joseph was one of those special ones who never gave up faith.. this form is magic raven…
Liked this.
piece of charcoal split into splinters
Thank you all for your compliments, everyone. I’ve only half been here, but I have been reading your comments. Seeing them helps me to remember why I am writing and to not give up. Thank you for visiting.
-Nicole