Comments on: Holler

By: ravenswingpoetry

ravenswingpoetry — Sun, 20 Jul 2008 16:35:38 +0000

Thank you, piece of pie.

-Nicole

By: pieceofpie

pieceofpie — Fri, 18 Jul 2008 18:32:33 +0000

amazing nicole… from milktoast father, influences we could not possible imagine the affect… family dynamics… i like that you heard yr voice…hollaring, awesome… it is a pleasure to read the different ghazals throughout the prompt…

By: ravenswingpoetry

ravenswingpoetry — Fri, 18 Jul 2008 12:53:52 +0000

Thank you, everyone!

Bev: I am honored by your compliments – I am going to blush…I never thought I was actually teaching anybody. I’m just trying to put my work and truth out here…but thank you again.

Crafty: the idea for using “holler” as a rediff was influenced from the Read Write Poem prompt from a couple of weeks ago (word limiting – e.g. Shuffle Words). I’d looked at the lyrics to R.E.M.’s “Fables of the Reconstruction” multiple times to see what jumped out, and the phrase “stand and holler” from the song “Kohoutek” kept jumping out at me, but I didn’t want to use it in the poem I wrote for that prompt…so I pulled the “holler” idea out and wrote this ghazal using it as the rediff.

Thanks, everyone, for stopping by! Your guys’ interested and compliments help me keep going.

-Nicole

By: Bev

Bev — Fri, 18 Jul 2008 10:19:33 +0000

I really like your poetry. You teach me so much.

I really thought this piece was amazing…how we are influenced by our parents but when push comes to shove, we have to exert our individuality, as adults.

By: Crafty Green Poet

Crafty Green Poet — Fri, 18 Jul 2008 07:35:43 +0000

I would never have thought to use a word like holler as the radif in a ghazal but you’ve made it work really well

By: Sweet Talking Guy..

Sweet Talking Guy.. — Thu, 17 Jul 2008 22:43:48 +0000

Yeah, nice one Nicole, you could holler this from the rooftops!

By: Tumblewords

Tumblewords — Thu, 17 Jul 2008 20:17:37 +0000

I like the way you moved through the stages in this piece. Nice work.

By: ravenswingpoetry

ravenswingpoetry — Thu, 17 Jul 2008 17:34:37 +0000

Thank you everyone….

Lirone – you could say that this poem details the anatomy of a relationship. We grow silent for many reasons: fear, anger, complacency (which is what I felt when I wrote that fifth couplet). In essence, what happens when you stop communicating?

-Nicole

By: Lucy

Lucy — Thu, 17 Jul 2008 16:19:10 +0000

What a brave choice for a refrain, works though. I love the happy ending!

By: Lirone

Lirone — Thu, 17 Jul 2008 15:24:40 +0000

Great work again. I really liked the first four couplets (indeed they have such a strong message that they could stand alone). But I was a bit thrown by the change to speaking about the narrator’s silence, because I didn’t understand where this came from – was it a result of her now going to the other extreme and speaking too much, or something else entirely?