This sijo was written for the One Single Impression prompt this week (“rest”). Enjoy.
-Nicole
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empty mannequins animated by external fire -
the search for success, a whip-cracking bitch denying them rest
it finally shoves them, still wearing their suits, into soft earth graves
Written 7/20/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
Oh, I really love this. I want to try this out, now!
Great: your use of the form and the theme of this. Love the “still wearing their suits.”
Thanks for introducing me to this new form and for creating such a great piece with it. That drive for success when it overwhelms is just plain lethal.
wonderful–not tried this–
A really fine piece, on a theme that I often return to in my own work. You did a great job with this form-I’m going to have to look into it more. Thank you for sharing this.
This is fantastic. Thanks for introducing me to the Sijo.
Excellent. Strong. Powerful. Concise.
Another new form for me to contemplate…. well done.
Thank you, everybody!
I think on the whole in American society we are so driven for success that we forgo the things that our bodies and minds need to run properly – including rest. I think I’ll take the longer life and the piece of mind over an early exit out of a meaningless life…and a life without love, family, friends, laughter, and higher purpose is meaningless.
I was fascinated by the soji when I first saw a post about it on Poefusion a few days ago. I will have to write more of them.
-Nicole
Very good Nicole. I will have to investigate this soji myself to see what it is all about.
Thank you, Lisa.
I think soji are fascinating. I am always fascinated when I come across a new poetic form.
-Nicole