This cinqku was written for this week’s One Single Impression prompt, “folly”. Enjoy.
-Nicole
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I
became
silver coated
glass to be your mirror – you
won’t look.
Written 8/2/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
Female Folly
I have been invisible to the object of my affection while dancing through hoops just to be noticed. Loved this!
..surprisingly even without the gender profile it sounds just as good..many thanks..
This is a wonderful senryu post. To put all that energy into silver coating and being attractive and then not to be admired. . . lots to think about with this poem.
I know that folly – nice writing!
Definitely been there!
Ah, such a familiar story – what a brilliant analogy for the process.
A familiar sad story.
Hmm, this is good.
I have this instant image of a symbolic punch flying through the air at the end of the poem ~ in the form of maybe a closed fist! Great write!
Very symbolic. I like this a lot!
yellowed piece of paper
Thanks everyone…this was written from a place where I was during my first marriage…almost fifteen years ago. Not a fun place to be in. There are still sometimes that I wonder what was really me and what is leftover from me trying to be like him so that he’d stay. How foolish I was…
-Nicole
love this. so short yet you manage to say so much.
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Hi Lissa…thanks for the linkback and the compliment…
-Nicole
wow, i agree few words but oh so powerful.. intro to a new form… yeah!!!