Subway
Sunday, August 10, 2008
This chained lune was written for the One Single Impression Prompt this week, “Stairways”. Enjoy.
-Nicole
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madness calls me
to drift down subway stairways
seeking dark scenes
nighttime casts clothing
a different city emerges, wild
Metropolis, the whore
decked out in
the finest concrete and neon
she glows, electric
and I see
her true blood, fragrant, coursing
through subway veins
junkies, freaks, madmen
bottle-blond horny women and
high-heeled queens
gangstas, and businessmen
on a secret double-sided
neon nighttime life
this I love
unscrubbed, raw, real, blood pulse
unsanitized and filthy
and I can
see it all nightly by
a stairway descent
Written 8/10/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
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A dark poem of the dangers and less-savory side of the city by night. Very well written!
Outstanding. I love cities, and I can see everything you describe here. The dangers, despite themselves, are beautiful. I love this. Thanks.
As someone with a love/hate relatioinship to big city subways (going back to the short time I lived in Toronto) I can feel and smell this one. Wonderful images!
Such a darkness filled with excitement and unexpected sights and sounds.
Excellent! this was such a great prompt for taking participants in so many diverse directions. Well done. G
that is quite a jolt for my country girl senses…i’ve never been in the subway at night
This is so visual…I love it! I’ve never lived in the city, so it sounds exciting yet a bit scary at the same time. I’d love to experience it myself one day!
wonderful visual words and images! And oh so true.
Well done! It’s applicable to many parts of life as well as the city at dark.
Such a good, graphic picture of the whole scene. I like the way you lead us there down the subway steps.
a most interesting view of subterranean humanity in the midnight hours…
Very evocotive. I love it.
I have not forgotten everyone, I have been reading your comments, I have just been really busy….thank you for dropping by and leaving your thoughts.
I have ridden the subways in DC, which are not actually that bad, depending on what time of day you ride.
I was imagining NYC when I wrote this.
Your comments are appreciated and welcomed, as always.
-Nicole
very much describing New York and pretty much any city subways, and you fill in the sometimes oddness when visiting the subway, especially strange in the am hour, plus I really like your character descriptions
I use your poem for Read Write Poem exercise, now reading your version, I almost think, I may also be writing about the subway but I really wasn’t aiming for anything in particular
I love”Metropolis, the whore/decked out in/the finest concrete and neon
she glows, electric”-great image of the big city (metropolis).