Beach Rendezvous in Six Sentences
This is my first attempt at the six sentences form and was written for Read Write Poem prompt # 43: rubberneckers. I remembered the couple who took their nighttime beach walk in Beach After Dark and found out that walking was not the only thing they’d do that evening…heh heh.
Anyway, here it is. Do you feel guilty for intruding? Perhaps a little perverted? Uneasy? Fascinated? You be the judge of your own feelings. Enjoy.
-Nicole
P.S. If you want some more good example of Six Sentences, also check out Scot Young’s blog.
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She sits astraddle the young man, straight and tall, the queen of his night. Her part of the dance has just begun, a slow up-and-down rhythm that she rides in time to the ocean waves lapping at their secret midnight beach shore. The young man’s chiseled, yet soft arms reach up, guiding sweaty hands that gently dig their fingers into her waist. His buttocks tightens, pushing and propelling him further upward into a singular darkness of pussy and moonlit, star-punctuated skies. I watch from a distance, hidden behind a cluster of rocks, my eyes affixed to the scene. The heat rises up from their secret coupling and begins to infect my own loins with a warm, tingling wash.
Written 9/6/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.
perfectly executed,, and oh so hot…
I like the way the narrator turns back to themselves at the end. The whole thing is great.
Excellently done. And I agree – hot!
I like the “singular darkness” idea… links beautifully back to the “queen of his night” phrase earlier.
Some great phrases. Sensual, I all this…
what does one call it?
Wow. Steamy stuff.
Hot. Just curious though, how are arms chiseled and sot. Smooth? Quite nasty. Got a beach towel? lol
i think it’s wonderful that the narrator is brave enough in the end to comment just how hot being a voyeur makes him/her.
Thanks, everyone.
No voyeur poem I think is complete without the narrator turning the lens on his or herself.
This made me a little…erm….hot writing this. And I enjoyed the challenge that I was faced with in this prompt.
-Nicole