Incense Sacrifice

This sedoka was written for One Single Impression prompt #31: “Fleeting”. Enjoy.

-Nicole

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musk and patchouli
dance in time-release ribbons
of pungent smoke through the air

petals and greens die
sacrificed by burning – once
spent, Egypt is forgotten

Written 9/28/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.

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~ by ravenswingpoetry on Sunday, September 28, 2008.

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14 Responses to “Incense Sacrifice”

  1. Oh, I like this one! Thank you Raven’s Wing…the pungency of this poem is going to linger for awhile–
    Thank you–

    Beth Patterson said this on Sunday, September 28, 2008 at 8:23 pm

  2. Wow, this is just splendid!! I love how you’ve braided all the elements together, and then the clincher at the end “Egypt is forgotten”

    Deborah Godin said this on Sunday, September 28, 2008 at 8:29 pm

  3. So visual I can almost smell it

    teric said this on Sunday, September 28, 2008 at 10:40 pm

  4. Beautufully done. And the last line takes you to that time.

    anthonynorth said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 10:29 am

  5. This teased more nose. Enjoyed.

    susan said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 11:04 am

  6. I Like this Haiku very much. Oh Boy, talk about images.this has it all. I love the burnt offerings going up in smoke. I would say they are prayers to God. But then…………..

    love-bd

    Melanie-bd said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 11:40 am

  7. Hi Nicole, yes, that smoke mixed with the scent of ‘hemp’ brings ‘fleeting’ memories. Now used in the US as a hair conditioner for dreadlocks. :-) [Google is my friend.]
    I liked your poem, I don’t understand the significance of Egypt.

    Jim said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 2:42 pm

  8. This one sizzles, I like it.

    Sandy said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 4:09 pm

  9. Incense offers a timeless aroma. I love it for that. This is lovely.Thanks.

    SandyCarlson said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 4:15 pm

  10. your words bring to mind an image that i love…when i blow out my prayer candle, i imagine the fleeting whisps of smoke rising heavenward

    qualcosa di bello said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 7:21 pm

  11. The scent is real! Lovely work…

    Tumblewords said this on Monday, September 29, 2008 at 9:11 pm

  12. I really like the scent images in this poem. Very nice.

    Pam said this on Tuesday, September 30, 2008 at 7:16 pm

  13. brings back a memory or two

    Scot said this on Wednesday, October 1, 2008 at 6:32 am

  14. There is a lot of memory tied to aroma-very Proustian!
    This is a fine poem, Thank you for sharing it.

    Edward S. Gault said this on Saturday, October 4, 2008 at 2:09 am

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