Jonathan’s Farewell to David

This free verse poem was written for the Friday 5 prompt at Poefusion. This week’s Five Words were: awkward, uninterrupted, fatal, damp, and skeptic. Enjoy.

a moment held in tension
between two absolute lines
each a trembling column of flesh and spirit
intentions lie as battered lumps of clay
pre-golem forms within the brain
unable to form, rise up, and march
outside of flesh into the air
unable to cut the wire and walk away
yet unsure of just the right thing to say

our faces
a fjord of two flesh walls
waterfalled by our tears
each flowing from distant inner lakes of sorrow
goodbye floats, fresh and acrid
a bittersweet cloud in the space between us
expanding to widen this space
until its outer edges meet distant galaxies
unable to be collapsed into
the smaller space that we once knew

this space between
an empty, dark sentence
spoken by my father into the air
which cannot sift my words apart from his
death warrants issue forth from his lips
knives assembled into a deadly regiment
destined steadfast without diversion
directly for your throat
unable to be turned aside
fueled by royal hatred and pride

your footsteps
I watch as you turn and flee
the hopeful within me says
that I will see you again
the skeptic within me says
that I will not

Written 7/31/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson. All Rights Reserved.

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About ravenswingpoetry

I am a 38 year old writer from Columbus, OH and the creator of Raven's Wing Poetry. I am a poet, seeker, fellow traveler, and autistic.
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6 Responses to Jonathan’s Farewell to David

  1. I don’t think there is anything harder than knowing their is distance between you and a friend. Knowing you won’t be able to see them again. Understanding that life has to move on without them. Nice job. Have a nice day.

  2. lirone says:

    Very powerful, especially the second verse – the fjords, and the floating goodbye, are very expressive phrases.

  3. Cynthia says:

    Amazing. Sad how some friends become lost to us, because of divided passions.

  4. pieceofpie says:

    beautiful nicole.. we can only imagine the thoughts of jonathan willing to give up a kingdom knowing it was not his to have… to have such an overwhelming love for another w/o strings is possibly beyond our comprehension …yet willing jonathan stayed by his father’s side knowing his fate…

  5. poeticgrin says:

    Wow. So powerful. The first three verses are so raw and descriptive. The last, so simple. So final.

    Thanks for visiting my site and for your feedback! I’m glad your comment led me here!

  6. Thank you, everyone, for your compliments on this work. I have always been intrigued by the relationship between Jonathan and David. So many theories abound. Whatever it was, these were two human beings who had incredible love for one another. I have always been inspired by their story…and by Jonathan’s bravery.

    Poeticgrin – that’s right, I visited your blog yesterday! Well thank you for coming by! I found your use of the minute form intriguing and I will have to try writing one myself.


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