Assent to Darkness

This week at Read Write Poem, prompt #41 was “Bare Bones – Stripping the Work Down”. We posted skeletons of our poems – stripped down works with some nouns, verbs, and so forth removed. We invited others to use the skeletons to compose new poems.

I chose a skeleton that Nathan Moore posted at Read Write Poem. This is what I composed off of his skeleton, with a few minor changes (words in bold are the words I inserted into the blanks).

This poem seems to be another foray into the darkness. I did this kind of like Mad Libs – that is, I inserted the first word that came to my mind in the blank. I hope you enjoy. Please feel free to comment.

-Nicole

———————————
The pen sits, poised but
nothing speaks. Each muffled, lonely
word
sits above the oblivion.
No insistent reaching offers inspired
success
. No verbal symphonies, just bare silence.

The atrocities happen like a
sick parade. Every day, a succession of
fresh horrors.

The void is empty like
dead stars. We
don’t seek salvation. We don’t breathe.
We only fuck the corpses in the dark.
Each soul dies through its apathy,
obedient to the blindness.

Written 8/23/08
© 2008 Nicole Nicholson and Nathan Moore. All Rights Reserved.

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About ravenswingpoetry

I am a 38 year old writer from Columbus, OH and the creator of Raven's Wing Poetry. I am a poet, seeker, fellow traveler, and autistic.
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7 Responses to Assent to Darkness

  1. nathan1313 says:

    Wow Nicole. This is great. I didn’t think anyone was going to make it darker than the original but you sure succeeded. the “corpses in the dark” line hits you like a kick in the head. I really like this a lot.

  2. This works very well. You too it into an entirely new way!

    paring it all down to the basics

  3. christine says:

    This poem is like going to the wretched side of the Matrix. It’s true, though, we do get wrapped in a construct of gloom and false perceptions.

  4. Annamari says:

    it is startling (in a disturbing way but nether the less)

  5. Jenn says:

    Very Dark! It is great. The last stanza is chilling; every line is like falling farther into darkness.
    I, too, did mine with words that came to me in the moment.

  6. Thank you, everyone. I knew this was more into the darkness than my normal stuff, but as with Marionette and the piece I’m going to read tonight at Wet Ink, I just went with it.

    -Nicole

  7. rob kistner says:

    Nicole –

    This piece of yours, Assent To Darkness, inspired me to put some finishing touches on a ‘rhyme-noir’ piece I’d had kicking around in my early-draft portfolio.

    This work of mine is not so much an answer to your piece here, as it is a reflection of the spirit of your piece. It’s entitled:
    Up From Hell

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